'In recent weeks, Japan Display Inc. (JDI), which absorbed LCD production of Sony, Hitachi, and Toshiba in 2011, has been losing money, has most of its business with Apple. Sales have been dropping of late, to the point of putting the company in jeopardy.'
mehhh nitpicking, for the average reader, I am sure it is "understood well enough"
At least is very through article describing all the parts used, cost and such.
Kudos on the article in question (^.^)
I digress, if Corsair wants to consider themselves the "most premium so now we get to charge arm and a leg" than the various parts overall should be night and day superior to what everyone else offers, not moderately better for a pretty hefty uplift in pricing.
Kind of reminds me of what Coolermaster did/was doing rebranding much of their older stuff to their "modern" naming, such as the Hyper line to Master line, not all of the master line stuff was all that much "superior" in some cases actually worse overall for the price point.
Idk, this one is a pretty poor example of how to write. Structurally its pretty much a disaster, we're well past nitpicking in my opinion. Writing is your profession; try harder.
Can someone explain to me how a producer can end up owing money to a consumer? "To date, JDI owes Apple more than $800 million."
Is this like the case with that sapphire cristal company (GT Advanced Technologies) and Apple where the later basically funded the new factory of the first with loans but ended up not using the product when the product was not all they wanted and basically drove the first to bankrupcy?
Thanks for clarifying that; it probably should have been in the article. I also found it odd that a supplier could owe its customer money.
I have to agree this was a poorly-written article. In addition to the issues already pointed out, "Stakes of other investors of JDI will get lower." also reads quite awkwardly. "Other investors in JDI will also see their stakes decrease." would be more natural and in keeping with the tone of the paragraph.
I try not to be nitpicky, understanding that not every author at AT is a native English speaker, but when three of the four paragraphs have either obviously poor grammar or an unexplained and seemingly-illogical statement, I have to wonder whether no one read the article before clicking Publish.
You know, I usually avoid commenting on grammatical errors in articles, and even here I'm not going to complain about the grammar, but the layout and flow of the article was very poor. It flowed like a novel when you keep reading the same lines over again on accident as you try to move to the next line. Multiple lines were repeated multiple times, and I was confused while reading because I felt like I already read it. The article flowed like Momento on a scratched record.
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Ushio01 - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
'In recent weeks, Japan Display Inc. (JDI), which absorbed LCD production of Sony, Hitachi, and Toshiba in 2011, has been losing money, has most of its business with Apple. Sales have been dropping of late, to the point of putting the company in jeopardy.'Someone get this article a proof-reader stat!
Dragonstongue - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
mehhh nitpicking, for the average reader, I am sure it is "understood well enough"At least is very through article describing all the parts used, cost and such.
Kudos on the article in question
(^.^)
I digress, if Corsair wants to consider themselves the "most premium so now we get to charge arm and a leg" than the various parts overall should be night and day superior to what everyone else offers, not moderately better for a pretty hefty uplift in pricing.
Kind of reminds me of what Coolermaster did/was doing rebranding much of their older stuff to their "modern" naming, such as the Hyper line to Master line, not all of the master line stuff was all that much "superior" in some cases actually worse overall for the price point.
See, stuff like that deserves hefty nitpicking :p
Operandi - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
Idk, this one is a pretty poor example of how to write. Structurally its pretty much a disaster, we're well past nitpicking in my opinion. Writing is your profession; try harder.nicolaim - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
+1futrtrubl - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
+2ksec - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
Sigh, Another Japanese Investment ? They still haven't learned or figure out why they are losing or not competing.PaulHoule - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
Smells like strawberries to me.mukiex - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
☜(ﾟヮﾟ☜) AYYYYYYvalinor89 - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
Can someone explain to me how a producer can end up owing money to a consumer?"To date, JDI owes Apple more than $800 million."
Is this like the case with that sapphire cristal company (GT Advanced Technologies) and Apple where the later basically funded the new factory of the first with loans but ended up not using the product when the product was not all they wanted and basically drove the first to bankrupcy?
alevan - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
"Japan Display owes Apple more than $800 million for the $1.5 billion cost of building the plant four years ago."From CNBC. Apple funded them to build a factory.
IBM760XL - Wednesday, February 5, 2020 - link
Thanks for clarifying that; it probably should have been in the article. I also found it odd that a supplier could owe its customer money.I have to agree this was a poorly-written article. In addition to the issues already pointed out, "Stakes of other investors of JDI will get lower." also reads quite awkwardly. "Other investors in JDI will also see their stakes decrease." would be more natural and in keeping with the tone of the paragraph.
I try not to be nitpicky, understanding that not every author at AT is a native English speaker, but when three of the four paragraphs have either obviously poor grammar or an unexplained and seemingly-illogical statement, I have to wonder whether no one read the article before clicking Publish.
wrkingclass_hero - Thursday, February 6, 2020 - link
You know, I usually avoid commenting on grammatical errors in articles, and even here I'm not going to complain about the grammar, but the layout and flow of the article was very poor. It flowed like a novel when you keep reading the same lines over again on accident as you try to move to the next line. Multiple lines were repeated multiple times, and I was confused while reading because I felt like I already read it. The article flowed like Momento on a scratched record.Cullinaire - Monday, February 10, 2020 - link
The geopolitical nature of this deal has been repeated ad nauseum over the centuries...Sahrin - Monday, February 10, 2020 - link
Everything Apple touches turns to shit/monglerbongler - Thursday, February 13, 2020 - link
>apple fronting money in the desperate hope that they don't have to continue to pay Samsung for the privilege of good quality OLED panels>failing miserably
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